Welcome back to Sunday Snippets.
As part of the Weekend Writing Warriors and Snippet Sunday groups, I’m posting very short excerpts from my writings. I hope you enjoy the snippets and will considering buying my book.
Continuing on from last week’s bit:
Her heart thu
mped so loudly, she was surprised he didn’t hear it. But something caught his attention. He jerked to a stop and backed around in a small circle, peering into the bushes, and brought the gun up into the firing position she knew well.
Thank heavens she’d worn her navy tights and top, instead of her usual bright colors. If only the shadows cast by the oak trees would screen her blond hair. Completing his circle, the man lowered his arms and jogged up the trail.
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Conversations with Horses and Others by Kate Wyland 
Nice snippet.
I think a different verb, other than “thumped,” in the opening line might sound better.
And maybe this line, “Thank heavens she’d worn her navy tights and top, instead of her usual bright colors. If only the shadows cast by the oak trees would screen her blond hair,” could be her thinking to herself rather than coming from the narrator.
Sounds like a good story brewing!
Yep, I agree with Chip about the line “Thank heavens she’d worn her navy tights and top…” I think it would sound better as her thoughts, pulling the reader into a closer third POV. It’s just a tad more fluid, too.
I’m liking this story, Kate!
My editor likes attribution or putting thoughts in italics — or both.
I would have never thought of that until he zinged me for it.
Funny how editors differ. I got the exact opposite zing.
I’m liking you story . Great snippet. 🙂
Thanks. Glad you’re enjoying it.
And I meant: I’m liking ‘your’ story. lol
I read it as her thoughts.
I did, too.
Sueanne and Sarah. That’s the way it was intended. Thanks for taking a look.
Skulking, hm! Intriguing.
Not skulking. Hiding! probably should have introduced the bit. Thanks for stopping by.
Whew! I’ll tell you, I was worried he’d find her!
I read that line as her thoughts, as well. In fact, while reading this, I was very drawn into the moment and sensed the danger, the fear. I really like this snippet!! I think it’s done well!
Good. That’s what I was trying to convey.
Thanks for looking.
I was holding my breath as I read this snippet. Excellent tension in every sentence!
It gets even scary next time!
Nicely done!
Interesting story going on here, very tense and pulls me right in – terrific snippet!
Jess and Veronica, thanks for stopping. Glad you enjoyed it.
Well done. I live in Wyoming so it was a surprise to see it in the title. 🙂
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What part of WY? This story is set in the NE near Sheridan. Love that area.
Okay, Kate. I’m blaming you for getting my blood pressure up. Excellent tension in this snippet!
Thanks! Gotta keep things lively.
I read it as her thoughts as well. Very tense moment. Nicely done!
Yup, I was in her head. Nice tension. Good job!
I also read it as her thoughts. Nice 8.
Joanne, Anne and Elaine. Thanks for the comments. More is coming. 😉
Wow! Now that was intense!! Well done!