Weekend Snippets #3

Welcome back to Sunday Snippets.

As part of the Weekend Writing Warriors and Snippet Sunday groups, I’m posting very short excerpts from my writings. I hope you enjoy the snippets and will considering buying my book.

Continuing on from last week’s bit:

Her heart thuWyoming Cover - 4x6 - #2mped so loudly, she was surprised he didn’t hear it. But something caught his attention. He jerked to a stop and backed around in a small circle, peering into the bushes, and brought the gun up into the firing position she knew well.

Thank heavens she’d worn her navy tights and top, instead of her usual bright colors. If only the shadows cast by the oak trees would screen her blond hair. Completing his circle, the man lowered his arms and jogged up the trail.

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29 thoughts on “Weekend Snippets #3

  1. Nice snippet.
    I think a different verb, other than “thumped,” in the opening line might sound better.
    And maybe this line, “Thank heavens she’d worn her navy tights and top, instead of her usual bright colors. If only the shadows cast by the oak trees would screen her blond hair,” could be her thinking to herself rather than coming from the narrator.
    Sounds like a good story brewing!

  2. Yep, I agree with Chip about the line “Thank heavens she’d worn her navy tights and top…” I think it would sound better as her thoughts, pulling the reader into a closer third POV. It’s just a tad more fluid, too.

    I’m liking this story, Kate!

  3. I’m liking you story . Great snippet. 🙂

  4. And I meant: I’m liking ‘your’ story. lol

  5. I read it as her thoughts.

  6. Skulking, hm! Intriguing.

  7. Whew! I’ll tell you, I was worried he’d find her!

  8. I read that line as her thoughts, as well. In fact, while reading this, I was very drawn into the moment and sensed the danger, the fear. I really like this snippet!! I think it’s done well!

  9. I was holding my breath as I read this snippet. Excellent tension in every sentence!

  10. Nicely done!

  11. Interesting story going on here, very tense and pulls me right in – terrific snippet!

  12. Well done. I live in Wyoming so it was a surprise to see it in the title. 🙂
    ~Summer
    My Blog Post

  13. Okay, Kate. I’m blaming you for getting my blood pressure up. Excellent tension in this snippet!

  14. I read it as her thoughts as well. Very tense moment. Nicely done!

  15. Yup, I was in her head. Nice tension. Good job!

  16. I also read it as her thoughts. Nice 8.

  17. Joanne, Anne and Elaine. Thanks for the comments. More is coming. 😉

  18. Wow! Now that was intense!! Well done!

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