Weekend Snippets Again

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It’s been a while since I did a Snippet Sunday , so I thought I’d try it again.  I know I have lots of fun reading all the other snippets posted by the many talented authors via Snippet Sunday and Weekend Writing Warriors.

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Here’s a bit from the second chapter of Wyoming Escape.  Let me know what you think.

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One dead body is frightening enough. A second one, plus a dirty cop, sends Mikela Richards fleeing for her life. She hides on a Wyoming Dude ranch, but her attraction to an on-leave Marine threatens her fragile feeling of safety.

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Mikela squinted against the bright Wyoming sun pouring through the cafe window and gave her breakfast order. Her last words were drowned out by a loud blast that shook the building and rattled the dishes. She clamped her hands over her mouth to stifle a scream while images of blood and death flashed in her mind. The waitress’ hoarse, smoky voice brought her back to the present.

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“It’s okay, honey. Just old Cranky’s truck backfirin’ again. Wish he’d get the darned thing fixed.” The buxom woman peered at Mikela in concern. “You all right? You’re white as a sheet.”

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33 thoughts on “Weekend Snippets Again

  1. Nice scene — makes me want to know what sort of flashback she’s having. (I had a car backfire that badly once. They heard it a quarter of a mile away or more and it tore a hole in my muffler.)

  2. Oh, I missed this story. Mikela seems pretty traumatised.

    • This is the start of the second chapter, so the provoking incident is missing. I’m not sure if I put up bits from Wyoming Escape before or not. Thanks for taking a look.

  3. What a vivid scene.

  4. Very visual! Plunked me down right in the middle of the scene. The waitress’s dialect is perfect. I must admit that when I read her dialogue, I heard “Flo” from the old TV show, “Alice”. Guess my age is showing. Ha! Good 8 🙂 http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=TpBJ90qbTyM

  5. Oh great snippet.

  6. I remember that show, Teresa, so my age is showing, too (even though I’m only 29–LOL). Nice snippet–I felt like I was there.

  7. I’m curious to know what memories that backfire brought up…

  8. burnsmillie

    I’m curious to know what memories that backfire caused to surface…

    • As I said, this is the second chapter. I didn’t want to repeat if I had already done #1. But if you’d read the beginning you’d know. 🙂

  9. Terrific scene that brought two reactions from me. First: oh, no! Second: How funny!
    This is my first time to participate in Weekend Writing Warriors and I’m really enjoying it.

    • Glad you enjoyed the snippet and the Weekend Writing Warriors. It’s fun to read all the new stuff.
      Thanks for stopping by.

  10. Classic PTSD—she’s definitely had a life-changing trauma. Very realistic!

    I thought of Flo the Waitress, too. 🙂

  11. Very nicely done and believable. Son is active duty army – sudden loud noises are not a good thing. Well written.

  12. Gem

    Scent and sound are two big emotional triggers–you pulled me right into her fear.

  13. Quite a scene! I could definitely relate to her fear when the big noise happened…and now I want to know all about her and the story. Great snippet!

  14. Great snippet! Now I want to know much more about her. 🙂

  15. Nice setup of the scene and way to show she’s suffered a traumatic incident all in a few lines. Great eight.

  16. I guess it’s easy to be jumpy if you’re on the run, wanted for a crime you didn’t commit! Thanks for sharing, great to meet you.

  17. Agree with everyone else–this snippet sucks the reader right into Mikela’s fear!

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